My Worst Nightmare by Freddie

Date: 22nd Mar 2019 @ 5:41pm

Darkness covers the sky at the silent hour. I'm the guy who goes by Freddie. I snuck into a window to the abandoned cinema. I took fewer steps with the floor creaking.  Noticing skeletons on the floor it gave me the heebie jeebies.

Shivers came down my spine.Smelling the sweat scent of popcorn I thought my mind was playing tricks on me. I wondered why there would be such a wonderful thing in such a horrible place?I heard footsteps behind me I wondered  did I dare look behind me?I turned around screaming! That's all i remember.
 

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Izzy’s mum wrote:

Great use of language Freddie, I especially liked the opening sentences

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Nihal’s Mum wrote:

I loved it Freddie. Every line made me to read next and next. You are great story teller!

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Mrs Willis wrote:

I love the use of the question "I wondered why there would be such a wonderful thing in such a horrible place?"-it draws the reader in. Well done, Freddie!

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Rachel wrote:

Great writing made me feel like I was inside the story well done😊

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