Devil's Spirit by Jack

Date: 22nd Mar 2019 @ 5:55pm

Hitting 3:00 am exactly,Jack, who is an explorer of abandoned houses,schools,and mansions breaks into a abandoned theater to be their one more time.Making a lot of noise ,bits of  window glass hits the floor “CRASH!”steps his first foot into the abandoned theater,shivers down jack's back,and creaking doors “RRRR”door opened “Hello who goes their?” “YOUR WORST NIGHTMARE!” said devils spirit “yEa I'm JuSt GoInG tO gO”in a nervous voice “DEVILS HOUR HAS BEGUN!”    

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Jacks Mum wrote:

Amazing Jack just brilliant, well done x

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Alix gidman wrote:

Fast paced. Well done. Just check your punctuation as this will make it even more powerful!

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Mrs Willis wrote:

You build the tension very well with the sounds of the glass hitting the floor, and the creaking door-well done, Jack!

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Rachel wrote:

Great use of words to set the story alive well done 😊

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