Creature by Nihal

Date: 22nd Mar 2019 @ 5:46pm

It was 1996 the clock had just struck 12. The wind howled in my face. In the need of food I looked around to find an abandoned house, the door was unlocked. I helped myself to the candies in the shop but then I heard distant creaking, the chandelier hung over the checkered floor.

I quietly tiptoed upstairs to find, in despair, something white and godly, my eyes were blinded . What was this ancient creature? Suddenly it turned around - I knew it was the end of me. I ran faster then ever.

I thought, ‘’might this be the end?’’     


 

Post your comment

Alix gidman wrote:

Wonderful description and detail Nihal. I can picture the scene perfectly.

Reply to this thread

Nihal’s mum wrote:

Nice try!

Reply to this thread

Nihal’s mum wrote:

Nice try!

Reply to this thread

Mrs Willis wrote:

I love the use of a question to convey the horror of what you were seeing-well done, Nihal!

Reply to this thread

Rachel wrote:

Great cliffhanger very captivating well done 😊

Reply to this thread

Ashchurch Primary School

Ashchurch Road, Tewkesbury,

Gloucestershire GL20 8LA


Main Contact:

Headteacher: Richard Gibson

01684 292376

Find us on Google